100-word response to Rochelle Wisoff-Field’s Friday Fictioneers photo prompt.
by Janet Webb
They were looking for a place to stay. I turned them away.
A brilliant star penetrated the coal-black sky, hushing the other stars to diminutive silence. They fluttered in its despotic presence.
A cold wind whipped across the sand. It invaded my home, conquering my bones with such a chill, I had to catch my breath.
I turned them away. She, so large with child, her eyes hungry for rest, leaned against her husband. He hung his head despondently.
Any room?
An extra room sat behind the wall that held the fireplace. Empty, warm, dry. I refused them.
The garish star flashed bitterly in the abyss.
Good writing.
Thank you for reading!
Reminds me of the Christmas story. Love your first line.
janet
Haha it IS the Christmas story. Thanks for reading!
The story was so well-dosed. Very troubling in some ways, and of course deliberately so!
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i knew immediately it was the Christmas story and i think it’s a wonderful take on the prompt. “i love this line: hushing the other stars to diminutive silence.” enjoyed reading this
thank you so much! you’re very kind.
Nicely done.
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I suppose somebody did have this on their conscience. Well done.
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Dear Flossie,
What a wonderful take. The other side of the story/. Bravo! Applause!
Shalom,
Rochelle
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What if that room had not been denied? Of course we know itr was God’s plan for it to be so. I like your embodiment of the real effects. The person who rejected them was a part of the grand plan even though they did not relaize or plan to be. Such a good use of this prompt!
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And to all a good night.
Except for you folks over there.
hahaha
I’m wondering why your character turned this couple away. A medical emergency, in effect. There’s a backstory unrevealed that piques my interest.
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Welcome. I enjoyed it. Inventive.
Great way to incorporate the prompt into the Nativity. Well done!
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It’s hard to believe they could be turned away….
ah but they were–a number of times!
Yes…
A brilliant take to see the other side of the Christmas story. That’s what SI wonderful with this group of people. Anything can happen 🙂
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Wow! That’s all I can say. Convicting, too. Thanks!
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“hushing the other stars to diminutive silence.” –a favorite line.
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This is really good!
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This is excellent! Why didn’t I think of this?
Thank you for the compliment!