Friday Fictioneers (03.01.13; 100-word limit)

sure it runs

Copyright Beth Carter

It ran once before it died.

I built it out of anything I could find: an old toaster, grocery carts, poolside cushions, abandoned tires. I fastened my father’s watch behind the wheel to measure how far I went. I’m not sure why I bothered; it’s clear a digital watch is required.

I don’t know exactly where I am. Women wear petticoats, and sewage lines the roughly hewn streets. It’s America, but I’m not sure when.

The components I need to get home don’t exist. I forgot about that. Is that odd?

I’m going to die here. I feel like I just started living.

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15 thoughts on “Friday Fictioneers (03.01.13; 100-word limit)

  1. in this line: “it’s clear a digital watch is required.” why is a digital watch required?

    also, here: “Women wear petticoats and sewage lines the roughly hewn streets.” a comma is needed after “petticoats.” otherwise, it sounds like women are wearing petticoats and wearing sewage lines. it doesn’t immediately read that sewage is a subject and lines is a verb, showing what the sewage is doing. compound sentences need a comma before the conjunction.

    i like the onset of panic that is coming at the end. well done.

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